The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of

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usage in

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Diego

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California

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, and the rest of the world with different

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Overall

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it is clear that

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a majority of

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is used for residential

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San

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and

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while

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the rest of the world uses the highest proportion of its total

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for agriculture. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that 60% of total

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San

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Diego

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is consumed for residential

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, followed by

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, with 39%, and

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, worldwide, with only 8%.

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, the rest of the world has the highest proportion of

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used for agricultural

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, which is over three-fourths of the total, at 69%, the second highest figure is in

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, at 28%, and the lowest figure

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, at only 17%. There are not any significant changes when we look at the percentages of

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used for industry, particularly, the figures for

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and worldwide are the same, with 23%, and the figure for

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is higher than theirs by 10%.

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

Topic: In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

As the world becomes technologically advanced,computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. what are some job positions that may be lost because of computers?What are some problems that may result from this situation?

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