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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart displays the temperatures
through out
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throughout
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 the
year
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 in
London
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, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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,
whereas
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 the table illustrates
amount
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the amount
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 of energy received
evey
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every
year
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 from the sun in these 3 locations.
Overall
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,
London
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 and New
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york
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York
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 experience the warmest days in the middle of the
year
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,
while
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Sydney
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 receives the lowest temperatures in the same duration. New
York
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also
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 receives the maximum
hours
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 of sunshine per
year
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. A detailed examination of the first graph reveals New
York
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 and
London
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 start off the
year
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 with just under 5 and 10
degrees
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, respectively, but show consistent growth every month, peaking at just under 30 and 25
degrees
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, respectively, in the middle of July. They both follow a similar downward trend towards the end of the
year
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. Contrarily,
Sydney
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 starts off the hottest at over 25
degrees
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 and gets colder over the next few months, stabilising at approximately 15
degrees
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 in July. The second half of the
year
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 is a mirror image of the first half. From the table, it is evident that New
York
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recieves
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receives
 the maximum sunshine every
year
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, at 2535
hours
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, closely followed by
Sydney
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 at 2473
hours
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 and
lastly
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, by
London
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, at just over a thousand
hours
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 every
year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, london, york, sydney, hours, degrees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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