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The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.
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The presented bar charts
comapres
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compares
compare
 data about the percentage change
of
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in
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 house
prices
 in five cities (New York, Madrid, Tokyo, Frankfurt,London) from 1990 to 2002.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
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apply
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London city shows the biggest change in its
prices
,
increased
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which increased
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 during the period
12
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of 12
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 years,
more over
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moreover
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, Frankfurt was the city
that
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where
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 its
prices
 dropped
more
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by more
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 than half.
Accoeding
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According
 to the first diagram, London
had
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reached its lowest point between 1990 and 1995, its
prices
 fell around -8%,
then
 its trend
nearly
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of nearly
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 12% increased from the prior in
period
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the period
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 1996 to 2002.New York reached -5% in 5 years;
furthermore
, it went up to 5% from 1996 to 2002. It can be seen that the statistics for Tokyo
was
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were
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 the lowest in both periods within other cities, In 1990 and 1995, its percentage was almost -7% and
it
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in
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 other
period
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periods
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its
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it
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 surged to -5%,
besides
, Frankfurt was a bit higher in 1990-1995 rather than the percentage in 1996-2007.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • suburb
  • metropolitan
  • trend
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • residential market
  • housing bubble
  • real estate
  • economic factors
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • property value
  • inflation-adjusted
  • comparative analysis
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