It can be difficult for small local shops to compete with large supermarkets and with on-line shops. How does this affect local communities? What could be done to improve this situation?

Summary Nowadays there is more choice for the consumer than ever before. Large supermarket chains sell products from around the world at
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prices. We are
also
able to buy anything we desire from the internet and, often, have it delivered the next day.
However
,
this
comes at the detriment of small local
shops
, and our local communities. I would suggest that we need to take measures to address
this
problem. Large chain
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are able to purchase and trade a very large volume of goods and,
as a
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they can sell goods with a very small profit margin.
Likewise
, online retailers have comparatively low overheads as they do not have to maintain a shop.
This
saving is
then
passed on to the customer in the form of low prices. In comparison, smaller local
shops
have to sell products at a relatively high price in order to make a profit. Unable to compete, they often face closure. The problem with
this
is that the community loses
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sense of identity. It is often these small
shops
that differentiate one town from another. With the loss of these
shops
, high streets and town centres become homogenised with the same
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fronts and products. It has
also
been found that local
shops
generate more employment than larger, chain stores. What we need to do is to encourage people to shop locally.
This
could be in the form of publicity campaigns, highlighting the benefits of supporting local
businesses
. The government could
also
play a role by offering tax breaks and incentives to local
businesses
so that they are better able to compete with larger companies.
To conclude
, we can see a number of, mostly financial, reasons why smaller
shops
are unable to compete and that the loss of these
businesses
would have a negative impact on the community. Individuals and government both need to play a role in supporting local
businesses
so that we can preserve the diversity of our towns and cities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economies of scale
  • local employment opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • community engagement
  • property prices
  • homogenization of the retail environment
  • social gathering points
  • unique and specialized products
  • local heritage preservation
  • online retailers
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