The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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The line chart illustrates the average

carbon

dioxide

emissions

in metric

tonnes

per person for the United

Kingdom

Sweden

, Italy and Portugal for each decade between 1967

Correct word choice

and

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2007. The United

Kingdom

and

Sweden

have lowered their

carbon

dioxide

emissions

whilst Italy and Portugal have seen an increase in the average number of

carbon

dioxide

emissions

per person in the

last

40 years.

Sweden

and the United

Kingdom

initially

started above 8 and above 10 metric

tonnes

respectively and

United

Correct article usage

the United

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Kingdom

has reduced

emissions

by approximately 2%

whereas

Sweden

witnessed a drastic change as they

have

Unnecessary verb

apply

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reduced

carbon

dioxide

emissions

below 6 metric

tonnes

. Portugal alone had witnessed the steepest increase in

carbon

emissions

as Portugal

initially

started below 2 metric

tonnes

and stopped just below 6 metric

tonnes

. Italy has

also

seen an increase, though less significant than Portugal because Portugal increased by approximately 4 metric

tonnes

whereas

Italy increased by approximately 3 metric

tonnes

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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

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