The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal  between 1967 and 2007
The line chart illustrates the average
carbon
dioxide
emissions
in metric
tonnes
per person for the United
Kingdom
,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal for each decade between 1967
to
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and
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2007. The United
Kingdom
and
Sweden
have lowered their
carbon
dioxide
emissions
whilst Italy and Portugal have seen an increase in the average number of
carbon
dioxide
emissions
per person in the
last
40 years.
Sweden
and the United
Kingdom
initially
started above 8 and above 10 metric
tonnes
respectively and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
has reduced
emissions
by approximately 2%
whereas
Sweden
witnessed a drastic change as they
have
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reduced
carbon
dioxide
emissions
below 6 metric
tonnes
. Portugal alone had witnessed the steepest increase in
carbon
emissions
as Portugal
initially
started below 2 metric
tonnes
and stopped just below 6 metric
tonnes
. Italy has
also
seen an increase, though less significant than Portugal because Portugal increased by approximately 4 metric
tonnes
whereas
Italy increased by approximately 3 metric
tonnes
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average emissions per person
  • trends
  • reduction
  • increase
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • pivotal years
  • industrial growth
  • policy changes
  • economic changes
  • energy sources
  • technology advancements
  • environmental policies
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