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Some believe that studying aboard is an exciting prospect while others state that it is probably better to study in their own country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays it is argued that having an education life abroad is an exciting
posibility
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possibility
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others think studying in the
country
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 where they were born is better.
Although
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, I totally agree with the opinion which says
sstudying
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studying
 in another
country
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 is better.
This
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country
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 has lots of advantages for students. The main advantage is it will be cheaper when it is compared with
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having it abroad.
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, there is no extra fee for schools in Turkiye if you are
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Turkish
people
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 and you can find a room easily in the dormitories which are provided by
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
.
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Also
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 you don't have to pay for public transport and for most activities which
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organied
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organised
organized
 by the
goverment
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government
.
On the other hand
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, studying
in
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abroad will give a
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chance
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 to students to find a job in
multinationals
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 companies. It is because
people
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 meet lots of
people
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 and
get
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 new foreign friends. After
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school
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school,
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 they keep in touch and visit
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others
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other
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 countries.Studies show that
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people
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 who have
their
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 high education abroad tend to work in multinational companies
due to
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 their wider society.
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, the ratio is 86% in Turkiye for
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 event
according to
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local
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the local
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 statistical office. In conclusion, Studying in their own
country
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 is more
economic
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economical
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 and logical, having a degree from a
univercity
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university
 which is located abroad will help
people
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 to find a good job and I think totally studying abroad is better than the other option.

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coherence cohesion
Work on coherence by ensuring clear progression of ideas in each paragraph and providing smooth transitions between ideas.
task achievement
Improve task response by directly addressing both views in more depth and supporting them with balanced examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the precision of language and minimize typos or grammatical errors to improve overall clarity.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction clearly sets up the discussion of both views and provides your opinion.
supported main points
You provide examples to support your points, which helps illustrate your arguments effectively.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the essay and reiterates your stance on the topic.
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