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The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.

The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.
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The table provides information on the total
value
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 of
fish
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 imported into the US in three different years (1988, 1992, and 2000),
while
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 the pie charts illustrate the percentage of
fish
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imports
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 from three sources: China,
Canada
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, and other
countries
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.
Overall
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, the total
value
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 of
fish
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imports
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 steadily increased over the period, with the highest
value
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 recorded in 2000.
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,
while
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Canada
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 was the dominant exporter to the US in 1988, its
share
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 steadily declined, with other
countries
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 taking over as the largest source by 2000. In 1988, the total
value
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 of
fish
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imports
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 into the US stood at $6.57 billion.
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 figure rose to $8.52 billion by 1992 and
further
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 increased to $10.72 billion in 2000, representing a continuous upward trend throughout the years. As for the sources of
fish
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imports
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, in 1988,
Canada
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 contributed the largest
share
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 at 60%,
while
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 other
countries
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 accounted for 27% and China for just 12%. By 1992,
Canada
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's
share
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 had dropped significantly to 34%,
while
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imports
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 from other
countries
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 had risen to 46%, and China's contribution had increased to 20%.
This
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 trend continued in 2000, with
Canada
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’s
share
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 falling
further
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 to 28%,
while
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 other
countries
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 became the largest
exporter
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, contributing 42%. At the same time, China’s
share
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 rose to 30%, making it the second-largest supplier of
fish
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 to the US by the end of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, fish, imports, canada, countries, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Import origins
  • Total import value
  • Trends in import values
  • Trade patterns
  • Source distribution
  • Import dependency
  • Fluctuations in trade
  • Economic implications
  • Demand and supply dynamics
  • International trade policies
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