The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.

The pie charts and table illustrates the information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the US in the years 1988, 1992, and 2000.
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The pie charts show the
propotions
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proportions
proportion
of sources of imported fish in the United
State
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States
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in
three
years
1988,1992, and 2000 and categorized by
three
countries
while
the table gives information about the total spending in these
three
years
.
Overall
, the pie charts illustrate the proportions of the sources in
three
years
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categories by
three
countries
and
its
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clear to see that there is
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a differnce
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differnce
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difference
of
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depending
in
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these
countries
as
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source
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sources
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over
theses
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these
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years
while
the table shows that the biggest spending was in 2000 and
lowest
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the lowest
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was in 1988. In
three
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the three
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pie charts, it is clear to see that
canda
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Canada
represent
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represented
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more about 60
percent
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per cent
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as a
source
of imported fish in 1988.
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the
precentege
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percentage
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declined
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over
year
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to become 42% in 2000.
In
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other hand
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,
Chaine
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China
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was the smallest
source
of imported fish with about 13
percent
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per cent
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in 1988
while
in 1992
its
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it
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increase
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slightly to
be
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20
percent
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per cent
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and
then
in 2000 it accounted
as
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one
thierd
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third
of the sources.  Another
source
is
another
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other
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countries
which
was have
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the largest proportion in 1992 with about 46
percent
. In the table, as it depicts the largest spending was in 2000 with about 10.72 billion dollars.
While
in 1988 is
considerd
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considered
as the smallest spending with 6.57 dollars.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words three, years, countries, source, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Import origins
  • Total import value
  • Trends in import values
  • Trade patterns
  • Source distribution
  • Import dependency
  • Fluctuations in trade
  • Economic implications
  • Demand and supply dynamics
  • International trade policies
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