In some countries and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing .what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?
Recently people have been doing less physical activity than they used to in the past, and
this
leads to a lot of issues in terms of people's quality of life. In Linking Words
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essay, the reasons I believe are the cause will be discussed, Linking Words
for example
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changes
in diet and in lifestyle of our century.
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Overall
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changes
in what and how we eat are certainly a problem, it is commonly known that processed Use synonyms
food
is very harmful to our bodies. Use synonyms
According to
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is the main reason for almost every chronic disease, Use synonyms
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is because elements in the products like omega six and saturated fats cause what is known as ''meta inflammation'', which means that the organism is exposed to a very tiny amount of inflammation, that in the long run damages all the organs. Linking Words
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food
we eat is full of sugar, which Use synonyms
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triggers the same inflammatory pathways causing, Linking Words
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, diabetes which is a mortal chronic condition.
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our fitness levels are drastically decreasing Linking Words
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in our habits. Use synonyms
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century working in an office has become the most common job globally, replacing more active ones like working as a farmer or in the building industries. Linking Words
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, the shifts are now very long, meaning less time is spent to provide and cook fresh Linking Words
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, which is related to the previous point.
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situation is getting worse every day, I think that governments should take action to solve these issues. Reducing shifts' hours could help people focus more on their health rather than on their jobs, Linking Words
as a result
, they could have more free time to spend exercising or cooking. Linking Words
Also
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in how youngsters are educated to eat, since eating fast Use synonyms
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is socially accepted, younger generations eat it very often, so they should be taught how to make more responsible choices in terms of what they eat.Use synonyms
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coherence cohesion
Consider adding a brief summary or final thought to strengthen the conclusion.
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Introduce more specific examples or data to support your points, such as statistics on physical activity decline or government interventions.
coherence cohesion
Clear and well-organized structure with a consistent introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
Addresses the task comprehensively, discussing both causes and solutions effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides logical connections between points, facilitating easy understanding.
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Uses relevant examples related to diet changes and lifestyle to illustrate main points.
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