You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council.

#developer #plans #center #home #council

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

Dear Sir or Madam The reason why I am writing

this

Linking Words

letter to you is that I heard about building new a shopping centre in my district. In my mind, it has several drawbacks and I have solutions for them. At the outset, for the building of a shopping area in the centre of the district, many trees should be cut off. And it will be the reason for the decreasing oxygen.

Furthermore

Linking Words

although

Linking Words

parents can buy anything comfortably, children,who live near

this

Linking Words

centre cannot play safely. Because the big type of transport for buildings or shoppers' cars will be dangerous for them.

Additionally

Linking Words

,today our streets have noise pollution already if there are new big shops,noise pollution will increase double or triple. For the mentioned reasons,I and people in my street disagree with constructing it. I can recommend another place to build it. 1000 square meters of place near the river has been free for several decades.

Moreover

Linking Words

,several skyscrapers and buildings of government were built near there. If a developer builds

this

Linking Words

shopping area in

this

Linking Words

place, people can get much more advantages from the building. I hope the developer will get my recommendation and construct his building near the river. I am waiting for a reply letter from the builder or the government. Yours faithfully, Kim Chin In

Submitted by makemoneyizzy16 on Tue Oct 15 2024

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion

To improve coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. Start a new paragraph when introducing a different point.

task achievement

To enhance task achievement, consider expanding on how the proposed alternative location benefits the community with specific examples.

suitable writing tone

The letter maintains a formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for addressing a council.

greeting and closing

The letter includes a clear greeting and closing, contributing to a respectful and organized structure.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

218 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

6.5
band
You are studying abroad. You must return home before the end of the semester for a family event. Write a letter to your supervisor. In your letter: explain why you need to leave early request time off reassure your professor that this will not affect your studies Write at least 150 words. You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task.
I am writing a letter to inform you of my leave for one month in order to sester's marriage .
7
band
‏consumer are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?
In this day and age, many competing organizations are offering their products through a number of advertisements to the consumers increasingly, in my aspect, I think that how the crowds spend their money is changing due to being influenced.
7.5
band
The number of people at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What causes the increasing rate of overweight people in society? How to solve this problem?
Obesity and diabetes are among the major health issues that are primarily caused by being overweight. Also, the percentage of individuals who are concerned about their weight is rising. In fact, it brings detrimental impacts to the sustainable development of the nation. I will highlight some points below.
6.5
band
Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In recent times, it is popularly noticed that social skills are becoming very valuable. In some industries, the recruiters feel that the interpersonal competencies of most job seekers have more value than their academic qualifications. I moderately agree with this opinion. This essay will discuss the reasons for my point of view.
6
band
In today's world, technology plays a significant role in people life. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology in our life.
Using technology in our lives has been one of the most debated topics over the last few decades. People have different views as to whether it has lots of advantages or lots of disadvantages. In this essay I will discuss both perspectives about leveraging technology in our daily life.

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping center near your home. Write a letter to the council.

‏consumer are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

The number of people at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What causes the increasing rate of overweight people in society? How to solve this problem?

Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's world, technology plays a significant role in people life. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology in our life.