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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and assumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and assumption of electricity in 2014.
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The provided bar graph demonstrates the top ten nations which generated and consumed
electricity
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, a first glance at the chart reveals that China is the first country in both production and consumption
while
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 Korea is the
last
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 one in the year given.
It is clear that
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 China and the United States not only generate
electricity
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 the most, by 5398 billion
kWh
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 and 4,099
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KWh
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kWh
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, respectively, but
also
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 they are at the high rank for utilizing
electricity
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 as opposed to other countries (5322
KWh
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 for China and 3866
KWh
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 for the United States).
Furthermore
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, Russia is devoted third place itself and the most interesting point is that the amounts of consumption and production are approximately the same in
this
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 nation, by around 1000 billion
kWh
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.
In contrast
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, the least amount of usage and generation of
electricity
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 is allocated to Korea, Rep (485.1
KWh
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 for production and 449.5 for usage).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production
  • consumption
  • generate electricity
  • energy-intensive industries
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • industrial output
  • disparity
  • electricity demand
  • energy efficiency
  • environmental implications
  • energy conservation measures
  • energy policies
  • coal-fired power plants
  • nuclear power capability
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