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Writing Samples
Band 6

All cars that burn fossil fuel should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many argue that
cars
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 that burn fossil
fuel
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 should not be used,
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, people should purchase electric
cars
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. I believe that electric
cars
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 are more convenient and efficient than fossil
fuel
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cars
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. These vehicles that burn fossil fuels should be banned,
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 their negative impact on the environment that leads to hazardous outcomes.
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, these
cars
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 produce a huge amount of carbon dioxide that detrimentally affects the environment in many ways.
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, carbon dioxide increases global warming which is a very dangerous phenomenon to humans, animals, and everything on
earth
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. Another thing is it causes air pollution which can lead to various diseases,
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, lung cancer.
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, electric
cars
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 are more environmentally friendly and convenient for many reasons.
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they work on electric energy that doesn't harm the environment as much as other kinds of
cars
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, which decreases the risks of air pollution and other environmental issues.
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you can charge them whenever you want at home without the need to drive to the gas station.
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 continues to my third point, gas,
this
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 type of vehicle doesn't require any gas which can save you a lot of money looking at how much the price of it is rising every day. In conclusion, electric
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cars
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cars'
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 benefits outweigh the advantages of other
cars
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 in terms of
comfortability
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 and health,
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furthermore
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 their disadvantages are few compared to fossil
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 vehicles.
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, they must replace fossil
fuel
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cars
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 to improve the quality of our earth.

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task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines both sides of the argument before stating your position.
coherence cohesion
Use transition words more frequently to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
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Provide more detailed examples to underscore the points you make, particularly on the economic aspect of electric cars.
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You have articulated a clear and strong stance on the topic by favoring electric cars over fossil fuel cars.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically organized with clear supporting paragraphs.
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You provided relevant consequences of fossil fuel usage and benefits of electric cars, making your argument compelling.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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