5The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below
The bar chart
provide
key information about activities by Change the verb form
provides
boys
and girls
in Australia.
The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that watching tv
and videos Correct your spelling
TV
are
the highest thing they take
100%. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
In addition
, boys
are doing bike riding more than girls
, whereas
girls
are art and craft
More than boys
.
According to
what is shown, boys
are doing activities on the streets usually like skateboarding and bike riding about 40% and 70% ,however
80% of Add the comma(s)
however,
boys
playing
electronic games at home.
In terms of 60% only Wrong verb form
play
of
Change preposition
apply
girls
playing video games it is 10% lower than boys
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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