The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
The given table compares the five
highest ranking
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countries for the tourism industry in terms of the number of
tourists
and travelers’ expenditure in two years: in 2012 and 2013. It can be clearly seen that the largest amounts of
tourists
visited France from 2012 to 2013,
while
the USA earned by far the most revenue over the period. Looking at the table more closely, in 2012, 83
million
people visited France and the second most popular tourist is the USA , with 66.7
million
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. Spain and
china
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China
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received just under 58
million
people,
while
Italy ranked fifth with only 46.4
million
tourists
. 2013 saw a rise of between 1 to 4, except for China, falling by 2
million
.
Tourists
in the USA spent twice as high as any other country increasing from $126.2
billion
in 2012 to $56.1
billion
in 2013. In the meantime, Spain received the
second highest
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amounts
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of
tourist
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tourists
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, rising from $56.3
billion
to $60.4
billion
, followed by France, China, and Italy. The interesting feature is that despite falling the number of
tourists
, Chinese revenue from tourism rose by 1.7
billion
in 2013.
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  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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