Some feel that school uniforms make schools safer for students, create a "level playing field" that reduces socioeconomic disparities and encourage children to focus on their studies rather than their clothes. Others say school uniforms infringe upon students' right to express their individuality, have no positive effect on behavior and academic achievement. Discuss both sides & give your opinion.

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In every country, on the
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there is disagreement around the topic of school
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dress code
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uniform
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ought to
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and it aid
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social balance and
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more attention to their education rather than dresses;
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some contend that having set dresses
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not make any difference in studies. In
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my opinion.
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specific dress code
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brings substantial benefits. First and foremost,
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assists
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a
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social
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equality
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, some kids belong to poor families and their parents can not afford expensive
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cases, some impoverished students
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by wealthy students or they force their parents to buy branded clothes under peer pressure.
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, uniforms represent the school sign.
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, if
children
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get lost
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school time;
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uniform
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helps
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to find
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recent
survey conducted by
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of India indicates that in 2002 Indian police solved 10 cases of child kidnap with the help of
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identity.
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, if
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have no set dress code
children
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can wear
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anything
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. It gives them more freedom and
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independence
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,
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wearning
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wearing
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sometime
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overwhelmed them and they come with happy faces;
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it positive attitude
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them to get higher scores in education.
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, an article written by The University of New York illustrates that 50% of nations in
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have no set dress in
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. In a nutshell, in my point of view
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is
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paramount in
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the schools
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schools
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system which brings equality;
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normal cannot substitute them.
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, having one casual day
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a week is a
prominant
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prominent
idea.
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