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You had a problem with your next-door neighbor. You have not been able to speak to the neighbor about this. Write a letter to this neighbor.

#neighbor
Dear Mr.Johnson We have been living in one street since 1997 and in
this
 period we had several incredible brilliant moments like we went fishing together or cooked a barbeque.
However
, unfortunately, you have been disturbing us at night for 2 weeks as your son is practising playing on the piano.
Although
 your son will participate in a big competition after 2 decades of days and he practises for
this
, I and my family cannot sleep very well. My daughter studies at high school and she is a leader in her class. As, a result of sleeping less,she cannot concentrate on lessons.
Moreover
, my son Jack
also
 goes to musician courses and he learns to play the guitar.
In contrast
, he does all
homework
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his homework
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 at lunch or when he comes home.
Furthermore
, I cannot
give
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apply
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focus on my tasks,which are given by my boss. When I sit to finish them,I lose my concentration immediately. As we are neighbours,I hope you can understand me. If your child plays his piano not at night,I and my family will be incredibly happy. I believe that
this
 misunderstanding cannot break our connections and I am waiting for your reply letter. Yours sincerely, Qodirov M.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the content is logically organized and all ideas are fully developed without ambiguous statements.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph generally conveys a single idea or closely related set of ideas.
task achievement
Incorporate more specific examples regarding how the night practices affect family members.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is appropriate for addressing a neighbor.
complete response
The writer provides background on the relationship and clear feedback on the issue, achieving a complete response.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of the letter are appropriately formatted for a formal letter.
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