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The map describes changes to a city since 1950.

The map describes changes to a city since 1950.
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The given maps compare
one
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 city in 1950 and now.
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, over
the
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time the
number of
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population has seen dramatic growth from 20,000 to 200,000. The greatest change until now was the increase of residential areas . In 1950
this
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 area consisted
only
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 a few parts of the city,
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however
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however,
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 it probably extended
for
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five times.
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, the airport station was enlarged for several flights. Major roads were built all over the city. In 1950 there was only
one
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 unique bridge and now an extra bridge was added
due to
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new
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the new
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 residential area.
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,
one
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 huge lake has appeared and to block the way of a flood
of
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it
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,
one
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 dam built. Near the
center
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 of the map, there was a government building which was the only
one
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. After some years
this
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 building was made smaller and the second
one
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 was constructed in large size.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 a long river which flooded from the west to south-east, divided into two small ones.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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