The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pipe charts compare the variety age of
population
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populations
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include
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Yemen
and Italy commencing from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
, the ages from 15 to 59 made up the largest proportion of Italy or even
Yemen
.
While
people
from
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over 60
years
old
was
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the smallest in
Yemen
except
Italy
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in Italy
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.
In addition
, both the ages from 15 to 59
years
and over 60
years
increased significantly without people from 0-14
years
.
Initially
, individuals from 15-59
years
remained around nearly half in 2000 and
rising
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to over
a
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half (57.3%) in 2050 in
Yemen
. It obviously made up around 60
percent
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and decreased deeply in 2050.
On the other hand
, people in
Yemen
from 0-14
years
take
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a little bit over a half and dropped gradually
for
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around one five.
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, in Italy, it simply made up about an over minor percentage and decreased approximately two times in 2050.
Moreover
, it is
a
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lowest ratio in Italy.
Last
but not least, the oldest age in
Yemen
just
take
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under 10 percent and enhance a bit in 2050. In Italy, it made up a percentage
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of aroun
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aroun
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around
40 percent and improve dramatically in 2050.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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