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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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This
 is argued that in contemporary times, various choices are provided for individuals. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion
due to
 the fact that modern equipment and different kinds of products bring us
this
 opportunity to choose anything that we are willing for.
To begin
 with, in the past, people used to purchase products that were in their area.
for example
, they only ate fruits and vegetables that were cultivated in their country. Or bought clothes that were made in their region. Because those types of goods were accessible and affordable for them and not foreign products.
However
, nowadays, we have great access to international markets so we are able to purchase food, clothes and any kind of merchandise from any part of the world which all are provided in our local supermarket.
Therefore
, we have much more alternatives than we had in the past.
Moreover
, thanks to the advancement of technology and a varied number of facilities nowadays all of us have more power and authority to select choices which bring us comfort and convenience.
For example
, in today’s world, there are plenty of ways of travelling which we can choose from.
However
, in the past individuals didn’t have many options and they used to travel in the only way which was possible at that moment.
Although
 some may argue that the development of technology and specifically AI have been diminishing our authority and shaping our choices in a certain way, I definitely believe that modern life has provided us with a varied range of selections with the help of the internet and new ways of connecting.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically from one to the next. Consider using linking words or phrases more effectively to enhance the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Expand a bit more on the counter-argument to strengthen your essay. Acknowledging more perspectives can provide depth to your response.
task achievement
Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples that support your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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