The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now.

The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now.
The map below shows the changes in the city from 1960 to now.
Overall
, the city has been developed and certain zones have become much larger.
Moreover
, the number of population has
also
increased. Looking at the details, about business districts in 1950 there was a small area, with low-rise buildings of all sorts because as it is written the population is small 20,000 and has not developed that much yet.
However
, now
this
area has increased, various corporations and companies have appeared, and the population has increased,
this
means that commercial activity is developing really well and there has been a transition to a centralized economy. In residential areas there used to be few houses, few people, and simple houses.
Whereas
, at the moment there are more people, apartments in a high-rise building and some other housing options have appeared. In the government building, there was some kind of crap that was far from the business and residential area.
Although
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However
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,what about bridges, in 1950 there was one simple bridge, some kind of cringe-worthy wooden one,
while
now with the use of some engineering technologies, there is a better and safer bridge.
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