In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapaers or books because they will be to read everything they want online without paying. to what do you extent agree or disagree with this statment ?

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In the upcoming years, the possibility of reading everything for free through online platforms may cause
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lack of
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printed newspapers and
books
. It may be possible
due to
the lower
price
offered by electronic
books
,
also
known as
e-
books
.
However
, some readers are still more comfortable
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using paper-based
books
. I personally agree with the latter statement because
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habit
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using printed
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is hard to change. On one hand, there are no additional printing costs needed to produce an e-book,
thus
reducing the selling
price
.
As a result
, more money can be saved or spent by an individual for other needs. In reality, the
price
for a printed science textbook can reach up to 300 thousand rupiahs.
On the contrary
, an e-book of the exact title can cost only about 200 thousand rupiahs. The difference in
price
is an advantage of
e-
books
compared to its
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.
On the other hand
, paper-based writings are much more convenient for some people to read than the online-based. Reading
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literature from a gadget can cause severe eye-sight problems,
such
as
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and irritation. Nowadays, paper-based
books
are still dominating the population of literature in several university libraries in Indonesia. Many
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that
although
e-
books
are simpler, the use of it may increase the student’s
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, which is bad for their health. As a conclusion, there may be a decrease in demand for printed writings
due to
the much cheaper option to use
e-
books
.
Nevertheless
, the convenience provided
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can be one of the reasons the public will still use it in the future.
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