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For more information and help with your IELTS test visit- IELTSAdvantage.com The graph above shows the stock price of four technology companies between 2011 and 2016
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The given line graph illustrates the stock
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price
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prices
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 of four different technology companies from 2011 to 2016.
Overall
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, it is clear from the line graph that the stock
price
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 of Facebook showed a rise
while
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 Apple experienced fluctuations throughout the period. Yahoo showed a steady decline, and Google showed steadiness. In 2011, the
price
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 of Facebook was 7000 dollars, and after a gradual
increase
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 it reached
at
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its peak in 2016 which
is
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was
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 20,000 dollars.
Moreover
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, the
price
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 of Apple started from 5000 in 2011 and it experienced a dramatic increase of 35,000 in the next year of 2012.
However
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, in the next year
of
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2013, the
price
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 of Apple showed a steep decline of 5000. The stock
price
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 of Yahoo in 2011 was 7000 and after experiencing a steady decline it reached
at
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2000 in 2016. Google showed a steadiness of 1000 dollar
price
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 throughout the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "steadiness" was used 2 times.
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