An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadventages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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In
this
digital epoch technology has
increasing
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by leaps and
bouns
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bounds
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and made
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it convenient
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life to survive in
this
state-of-the-art era.One
schol
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school
of thought
claim
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claims
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that
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a raising
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raising
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rising
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number of folks are buying their need
through
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apply
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online.
This
essay shall discuss
positive
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the positive
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as well as
negative
side
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sides
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for
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both people and scals to shopping online and it will
bw
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be
articulated in forth
coming
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paragraphs. To commence with,
now a days
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nowadays
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people
more
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apply
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prefer online shopping as it provides ample
of
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advantages.
Firstly
,online shopping is flexible to use for everyone as
its
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it's
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open round-the-clock
also
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and also
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,
proivde
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provides
multiple
opitions
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options
for
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a perticular
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perticular
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particular
thing
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things
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.
Secondly
,it gives
customer
door to door facility which saves customers time.
Thirdly
,online shopping
suggest
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what
customer
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customers
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is looking for and
suggest
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suggests
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thei
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the
their
needy
iteam
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item
team
.
Lastly
, there are
number
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a number
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of
application
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applications
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avaliable
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available
which provide household things
along with
other
sectots
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sectors
sections
too which make
easy
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it easy
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for humans and
for
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artificial
body
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bodies
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to use.
On the other hand
,every rose
have
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their
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its
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own
throns
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thrones
it
aloso
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also
have
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has
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some disadvantages.Online shopping has more chances
customer
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customers
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get fraud.Online shopping
give
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lucreative
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lucrative
creative
sales which attract
customer
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customers
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to buy a lot of things which cost,
customer
can spend more amount of money on it and people spend more time on it.
Furthermore
, the
most
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dark side is recent individuals
more
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apply
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prefer online
beceause
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because
it provides more services ,which
harm
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harms
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the
smal
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small
scale companies and high
chances
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chance
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to shut
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of shutting
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down
such
small firms. To recapitulate,the
trand
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trend
of using online shopping is jumping day by day
due to
superb facilities but it all
have
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has
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an advers
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advers
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adverse
effect on small companies. After all digital era made
easy
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it easy
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to
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for
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lives
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life
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but hard for
business
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businesses
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.
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introduction conclusion
Ensure that your introduction is concise and directly addresses the topic. Avoid vague phrases like 'in this digital epoch'. Instead, clearly state the topic and your thesis.
logical structure
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs with distinct main ideas. Each paragraph should have a topic sentence that outlines the main point of the paragraph.
relevant specific examples
Use more specific examples to support your points. Examples could help clarify how online shopping affects individuals and companies differently.
clear comprehensive ideas
Be careful with your language use and vocabulary. Some phrases and words are misspelled or used incorrectly (e.g., 'leaps and bounds', 'a school of thought', 'lucrative', 'cause', 'adverse').
complete response
The essay identifies both advantages (e.g., convenience, time-saving) and disadvantages (e.g., fraud risk, impact on small businesses) of online shopping.
introduction conclusion
There is an attempt to structure the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs discussing pros and cons, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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