Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's deveopment while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantage of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

There is an ongoing debate among some individuals regarding
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what is
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best for
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learning and development to study at home or at
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However
, both approaches have
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their
key advantages.
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essay will examine the advantages of both views and give my opinion. Teaching
children
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as homeschooling become
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nowadays and
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considered
by many
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parents
as the best option based
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variety
of reasons.
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argue that homeschooling
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many benefits
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flexible
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schedule
, less stress on
children
and customized learning styles and curriculums.
Furthermore
, families can create a schedule that fits their lifestyle, allowing for more time for family activities, travel, or extracurricular learning opportunities.
In addition
,
children
can learn in a less pressured environment, reducing anxiety and allowing for a more relaxed pace.
Lastly
, parents can tailor the curriculum to suit their child’s learning style, interests, and pace, ensuring that they fully understand the material.
Conversely
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others argue that
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schools and real classrooms
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important for
children
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learning and development
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for
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their
social
skills
.
Likewise
, the
children
can learn different learning
skills
while
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classroom. they can make friend which
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homeschooling
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not offer.
Also
, it
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their
skills
to learn from any challenges that they face in any
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In
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they learn how to
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with different types of classmates.
For instance
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I
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experienced
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of how shy
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become socially interactive
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semester
by invloving in
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friendships
friendship
and relations.  In my view, going to
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school is very important for the students to gain social, communication, and academic
skills
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homeschooling does not
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. In conclusion, there
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a few how
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about
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homescooling
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homeschooling
is
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the best for
student
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while
others argue that
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schools
is
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the best for not only their academic
skills
but
also
for engaging in
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situation
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and
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their
skills
of making
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and collaborations.
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task achievement
You present a balanced discussion of both homeschooling and traditional schooling. However, some points could be more deeply explored to provide a fuller picture of each method's advantages. Consider providing more specific examples or statistical evidence to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay is organized with clear paragraphs for each side of the argument, but it could benefit from smoother transitions between ideas to enhance the logical flow. Work on clear topic sentences and concluding sentences in each paragraph for better coherence.
introduction conclusion present
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulates the main debate effectively. It sets the stage well for discussing both sides and presents a summary conclusion.
supported main points
You provide specific examples, such as personal experience as a teacher, which adds authenticity and personal insight to your argument.
relevant specific examples
The main points are supported with relevant reasoning that reflects common perceptions of both homeschooling and traditional schooling.

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