Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's deveopment while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantage of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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There is an ongoing debate among some individuals regarding

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learning and development to study at home or at

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argue that homeschooling

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and customized learning styles and curriculums.

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, families can create a schedule that fits their lifestyle, allowing for more time for family activities, travel, or extracurricular learning opportunities.

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can learn in a less pressured environment, reducing anxiety and allowing for a more relaxed pace.

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can learn different learning

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task achievement

You present a balanced discussion of both homeschooling and traditional schooling. However, some points could be more deeply explored to provide a fuller picture of each method's advantages. Consider providing more specific examples or statistical evidence to strengthen your argument.

coherence cohesion

The essay is organized with clear paragraphs for each side of the argument, but it could benefit from smoother transitions between ideas to enhance the logical flow. Work on clear topic sentences and concluding sentences in each paragraph for better coherence.

introduction conclusion present

The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulates the main debate effectively. It sets the stage well for discussing both sides and presents a summary conclusion.

supported main points

You provide specific examples, such as personal experience as a teacher, which adds authenticity and personal insight to your argument.

relevant specific examples

The main points are supported with relevant reasoning that reflects common perceptions of both homeschooling and traditional schooling.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

334 words

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