Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Advertising has become a marketing tool
that is
commonly used in today’s world. While
some people perceive it as a very useful tool to encourage someone to buy things, others believe that it is not work again because people not
Add a missing verb
do not
attention
to it anymore. I believe advertising still works for nudging people to buy things and will discuss the various aspects of this
topic In this
essay.
On the one hand, advertising can be found in many places, however
, not all advertising has a good placement strategy. There are some companies
that have advertisements that not
put on a suitable target market area. Add a missing verb
do not
For instance
, billboards for babies
food that Change the noun form
baby
put
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are put
on
high school Change preposition
in
area
would not get many Fix the agreement mistake
areas
buyer’s
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buyers’
attention
compared to billboards which put in kindergarten or playground areas. That is
because their majority target markets are moms that usually there in kindergarten and playground areas.
On the other hand
, some advertisements have proven to bring some positive impacts for companies
. Some companies
who have a good strategy for their advertisement leads to bring
more awareness and Change the verb form
bringing
sales
conversation. For example
, a milk product called bear
has good advertising by bringing a good message Capitalize word
Bear
to achieve
a healthy life that resonates with their customer, and Change preposition
about achieving
get
more Correct subject-verb agreement
gets
sales
during COVID-19. Moreover
, nowadays there are many forms of advertisement that are more creative and get people’s attention
. Another success story, naming rights for some banking products in mass rapid transit in Indonesia became viral and reached high awareness among citizens. Thus
, some citizens have started to consider using that viral banking product.
Finally
, Although
, some advertisements are not successful due to
the wrong target market, others are extremely successful in getting more awareness and sales
. I believe with good strategies in advertising, the companies
would get more buyer’s attention
and sales
conversion.Submitted by writingbersama on
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Grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance readability. For instance, 'not work again' should be 'does not work anymore.'
Introduction
Include a clearer thesis statement in your introduction to clearly outline the points you will discuss.
Paragraph Structure
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea, and use topic sentences to preview the paragraph's content.
Content Development
Provide more specific and varied examples to support your points. This will help make your arguments more convincing.
Structure
The introduction and conclusion are clearly present, with a solid effort to address both views and provide a personal opinion.
Balanced Argument
The essay makes a good attempt to discuss both views fairly and balance the discussion.
Examples
Use of real-life examples, such as the advertisement for a milk product and banking products, to bolster the argument.
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