In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Others people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extenet do the advantages of having an ageing population outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some states, folk are now living longer, than in the old time. Some people see
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population influences by restoring a culture and tradition in different republics which is critical in the global world but
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conservative government because most of the old
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countries have a problem with
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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, make sure to address all parts of the task comprehensively. Discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of an ageing population, and offer a balanced perspective. Additionally, ensure that your examples clearly support your arguments.
coherence and cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, work on structuring your essay more logically. Ensure there's a clear introduction and conclusion, and that your main points are clearly supported by evidence or examples. Try using linking words or phrases to connect ideas more seamlessly.
language and vocabulary
Check for grammatical and vocabulary inaccuracies, and try to use a range of sentence structures and vocabulary. This will make your essay more fluent and easy to understand.
task achievement
The essay covers both the potential benefits and drawbacks of an ageing population, showing an understanding of the topic from different perspectives.
task achievement
The essay acknowledges the cultural and societal impact of an ageing population, which demonstrates an awareness of more complex issues related to the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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