The graph below shows tourism statistics among Venezuelian students from 2011 to 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words
The line graph depicts the
number
of visiting Venezuelan students
between 2011 to
2014.
After analysing the line graph, it can be seen clearly that in 2011, the Correct word choice
and
number
of visiting students
was 15000 in London
while
in Paris it was 10000 in the same year.After that, in London
, there was slight
increase in figure till 2014.Add an article
a slight
whereas
, in Paris, the amount went up to 13000 in 2012 , then
further
surged to 20000 in 2013.Then
noticeably decreased to 18000 at the last
year.In 2014, there was a small difference in digits of visiting students
between Paris and Rome
Moving toward the
Correct article usage
apply
Rome
, in 2011 the visiting students
was highest in Rome
whilst the numbers dropped to around about to
12000 from 18000 in 2012. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, in 2013 the numbers climb
to approximately 17000. After Wrong verb form
climbed
that
there was a minor decline in the Add a comma
that,
number
of visiting students
. However
in 2014, the total Add a comma
However,
number
was 16000.London
had the biggest digits of visiting students
in 2014 while
Rome
had the lowest.
Overall
, the most visited place in London
and the least visited region was Rome
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