The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and

amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The graphs illustrate the changes in having electrical means and how much time spent doing
housework
by
households
in a country in a 99-year period between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, the percentage of electrical appliances saw a significant rise during the mentioned years.
However
, there was a drop in number of hours of
housework
per week during the period between 1920 and 2019. If we look at the details, owning a refrigerator rocketed to 90% between
households
till 1960 which
then
it
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leveled
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off at 100% for the rest of the period. Having a vacuum cleaner was partially the same. 30% of
households
had a vacuum cleaner in 1920, but after experiencing a considerable rise, 100% of them
was owning
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one in 2000. Owning a washing machine rose mildly till 1960 and
then
it dipped in 1980.
Subsequently
, it continued its moderate rise till 2019. As regards the amount of time spent doing
housework
, the number of hours has been decreased between 1920 and 2019.
This
might be caused by
increased
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use of electrical appliances which helps
households
doing
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the
housework
faster and even with better quality.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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