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Solar energy is becoming popular in many countries of the world because of its availability without any limit. Do the advantages of solar energy outweigh its disadvantages?

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Due to
 being available and limitless, solar
energy
 is gaining popularity among several nations in the world.
This
 essay will discuss both benefits and drawbacks and explain how using modern power sources' benefits
overcome
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overcomes
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 its negative points. On the one hand, it is generally acknowledged that the needed equipment for
this
 project is strikingly expensive and governments should spend a considerable quantity of money on
this
 industry.
Also
, the old equipment will be useless in
this
 regard and they should change the entire system basically.
Additionally
,
this
energy
 source directly depends on weather conditions.
Therefore
, in the regions with a low chance of sunshine, it could not be used to produce
energy
. A case in point is old forests with dense trees which do not allow sun rays reach to the ground.
On the other hand
, there is ample evidence that the equipment, most importantly, solar panels can be installed in every humble place even on little rooftops. So, everybody can have their own generator in their homes.
Moreover
,
this
 technology does not produce any waste or pollutants.
As a result
, one of the main pollution makers could be removed from the environment.
For instance
, every day we witness a significant amount of pollutants being released into the air by electricity manufacturers.
Consequently
,
although
 replacing old energies with solar
energy
 would need a huge financial investment through the regions which have enough hours of sunshine, it could contribute to other projects that focus on contaminant reduction in the environment, simultaneously.
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structure
Ensure a clear topic sentence for each paragraph to enhance coherence.
cohesion
Incorporate transitional phrases more effectively to improve flow between ideas.
depth of response
Strive for more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and demonstrate task understanding.
balance in argument
Consider a more equal discussion of advantages and disadvantages for a balanced argument.
introduction & conclusion
Effective introduction and conclusion that clearly presents your standpoint.
use of examples
Good use of examples to illustrate points, though more specificity could improve impact.
paragraph structure
Well-structured paragraphs with clear main ideas.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • inexhaustible
  • renewable energy
  • mitigating
  • initial setup cost
  • long-term savings
  • low maintenance
  • remote and rural areas
  • socio-economic development
  • intermittent
  • storage technologies
  • toxic materials
  • recycling and disposal mechanisms
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • fossil fuels
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