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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the environment as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals opt to eliminate fish or meat
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 their diet, believing
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that
this
 choice not only improves their health but
also
 impacts the
environment
 at large.
While
 some people argue that the
abscent
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absence
 of these diets in meals causes
deficienties
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deficiencies
 which
leads
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 to illnesses, some
sees
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 it to be
danger
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 to the human body system and
environment
.
This
 essay will argue that the intake of these
food
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 is beneficial to both the body and
environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
, Having
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proper
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 balanced diet in meals can
push
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keep
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sickness away and add
longitivity
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longevity
 to
ones
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 life.
For instance
, vitamins and minerals can be gotten from the intake of fish which generates omega 3 and is crucial for heart health.
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 meat is important to the human body and it provides vitamin B12 which is essential for red blood cell formation.
Additionally
, the
environment
 is impacted positively
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consumption
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 of these poultry products because it reduces the quantity of
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Coherence and cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction outlining the main points that will be discussed in the essay. This will help guide the reader through your argument.
Coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and relates directly to the essay question. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
Coherence and cohesion
Conclude your essay with a summary of your main points and state your opinion clearly.
Task achievement
Make sure to fully develop each argument. For instance, explain how the consumption of meat and fish impacts the environment beyond just reducing their quantities.
Task achievement
Provide specific examples or statistics to strengthen your points, especially regarding environmental impact.
Coherence and cohesion
The essay begins with a clear statement of the issue to discuss, helping set the stage for the argument.
Task achievement
You mention important nutritional benefits of meat and fish, such as omega-3 and vitamin B12, which directly link to health advantages.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Sustainable living
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Carbon footprint
  • Deforestation
  • Nutritional deficiencies
  • Antioxidants
  • Livestock farming
  • Biodiversity
  • Ethical stance
  • Animal cruelty
  • Cultural shifts
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