The diagram below describes the structure of a home smokery and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below describes the structure of a home smokery and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram presents the different processing procedures to create olive
oil
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. The data includes seven major stages.
Overall
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, there are various steps to be able to manufacture olive
oil
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.
This
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initially
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made
from
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getting the fruit from the olive tree into the
last
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stage which includes storage and sales of the product. In detail, in order to create olive
oil
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,
the first step is
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picking the olives from the tree and placed in a box to undergo a rinsing process using cold water. After that, olives are positioned in a conveyor belt and will
then
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be smashed to separate the paste from the olive stones.
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, to fully extract the
oil
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from the olives, it must be placed into a bag with holes and pressed hard using the pressing machine. Now, the fully extracted paste is placed in a machine where it will separate water and
oil
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.
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, the
oil
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is stored in tubes or containers and will be ready for selling.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • firebox
  • smoke generation
  • underground passage
  • smoking chamber
  • smoke flow
  • vent
  • consistent flow
  • smoked flavor
  • indirect heat
  • structure
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