Successful sports professinals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays,
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the sport
sport
industry is the one of Change the noun form
sports
business
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businesses
that is
growing significantly. Many people Linking Words
who
are Correct pronoun usage
apply
altheltes
struggling Correct your spelling
athletes
due to
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the intese
intese
of competition. Anywise, some of Correct your spelling
intense
altheltes
deal a Correct your spelling
these
good
amount of money than other professions which is more important , making some people think Correct word choice
better
this
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unfair
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is unfair
for
them. I Change preposition
to
pesonally
believe that every career Correct your spelling
personally
have
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has
the
important job for making Correct article usage
an
Use synonyms
country
better.
On the one hand, Add an article
the country
Use synonyms
Sportsman
is the career that Fix the agreement mistake
Sportsmen
have
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has
very
low percentage of Add an article
a very
being
Unnecessary verb
apply
sucessful
because they have Correct your spelling
successful
pratice
very hard to be the best in the world or outstanding than other players, to Correct your spelling
practised
illustates
, Michael Jordan is Correct your spelling
illustrate
illustrates
the
one of the greatest basketball Correct article usage
apply
player
who are dominating any players, many of social media said that he is gifted or talented. Change to a plural noun
players
However
, in the background, he Linking Words
pratices
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practices
practised
everyday
very hard using discipline and his Replace the word
every day
hardwork
to be that Correct your spelling
hard work
skillful
. Change the spelling
skilful
Besides
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this
, Linking Words
sportsman
can bring Use synonyms
the
fame to the Correct article usage
apply
country
, Use synonyms
for example
, the American former team which Linking Words
parcipitated
in Correct your spelling
precipitated
participated
Olympic
games and won, making Correct article usage
the Olympic
reputation
and their names to the Correct article usage
a reputation
country
.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, other Linking Words
profession
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professionals
such
as Linking Words
Add an article
a doctor
doctor
, Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
farmer
and so on shouldFix the agreement mistake
farmers
recieved
more funds from Correct your spelling
received
receive
government
because Add an article
the government
Linking Words
this
careers Correct determiner usage
these
is
the cornerstone of the countries and play an important role Correct subject-verb agreement
are
to make
the Change preposition
in making
country
more prosperous, Use synonyms
for example
, a doctor is Linking Words
the
occupation who works Correct article usage
a
atleast
10 hours a day. Correct your spelling
at least
However
, it is not enough because it takes many Linking Words
knowledges
to be a doctor. For Fix the agreement mistake
knowledge
this
Linking Words
reasons
, making some people think it is unfair Fix the agreement mistake
reason
comparing
to the Change the form of the verb
compared
sportsman
's salary.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
sportsman
Use synonyms
deserved
Wrong verb form
deserve
the
high amount of cash Correct article usage
a
due to
their Linking Words
hardworks
and low Correct your spelling
hard work
oppurturnity
to Correct your spelling
opportunity
being
Wrong verb form
be
sucessful
. Anywise, Correct your spelling
successful
i
believe that every Change the capitalization
I
occupations
Change to a singular noun
occupation
have
its own Correct subject-verb agreement
has
important
to make the world better.Replace the word
importance
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