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As parts of education, students should spend a period of time living in another country to learn its language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Moving to another
country
 as an immigrant has always been challenging, and
also
 with lots of difficulties that make it sound stressful. In order to reduce the issues it is best to try to gain knowledge about the destination's
language
 and culture, even more, master it.
For
this
 reason,
besides
 the process of education, international students spend a considerable amount of time learning the
language
 and way of life in the new
country
 that they are living in. In my opinion, it is really efficient to get familiar with everything as much as possible. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on my reasons. As immigrating to a new state can be extremely stressful, one of the most effective solutions is to learn the
language
 to its highest levels. The reason is that the more one is able to communicate with native people, the higher the possibility of making new friends. On top of that building strong relationships can be helpful in future personal or occupational matters. As an example,it is evident that graduate students who are more capable of verbal communication will have better chances of finding jobs than those with weak
language
 skills. Another useful solution to minimize the pressure of living in a new
country
 is getting familiar with the cultural and traditional aspects of there.
This
 knowledge not only helps individuals develop an attachment to the new place but
also
 assists them in feeling like they are at home.
For instance
, it is repeatedly been mentioned by immigrants that the amount of suffering from depression is noticeably high
due to
 getting homesick after immigration. To overcome
this
 problem, getting attached to the culture and enjoying it can be helpful.
To sum up
, from my viewpoint, I agree that students who move to a new
country
 should definitely put a lot of effort into learning its
language
 and culture to live a normal, happy life there.
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