The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows air pollution levels among four countries in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares 4 major air pollutant amounts in
China
,America,Japan and
Australia
in 2012. The units are given in
PPM
.
Overall
,the most features belong to the industry,
while
the least number account for electricity generation.
In addition
, the rates in
Australia
show stable
PPM
on a bar chart.
According to
Asian countries, Japanese citizens suffered from electricity generation with 15
PPM
while
this
rate in
China
was 60.
Also
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this
rate for industrial purposes was 2 times greater in
China
80
PPM
and almost 40
PPM
respectively.
Finally
, the riskiest air quality was in
China
, and the greatest climate is
to
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in
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Australia
. Turning to other Nations, America fluctuated in digits of pollutants in 2012 nearly 60
PPM
for the transportation system,almost
the
Correct determiner usage
all the
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other facilities have the same features with electricity generation and industrial facilities.
However
,
Australia
remained almost the same statistics 20
PPM
whole year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china, australia, ppm with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollution levels
  • sources of pollution
  • industrial pollution
  • transportation-related pollution
  • household pollution
  • highest levels
  • lowest levels
  • notable changes
  • anomalies
  • comparisons
  • summarise
  • highlight
  • analyze
  • chart
  • data
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