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It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future.

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Money
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 was always a main subject in different debates and
opinons
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opinions
. It is vital to anyone to keep some
money
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 aside for the upcoming events, including
younsters
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youngsters
. I totally agree with
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intiative
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initiative
 because
money
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 is an essential part
in
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 everyone's life and building the habit of
money
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 saving
form
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from
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 an early age can remain with someone for his entire
live
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. One of the main
reason
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reasons
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 why saving
money
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 is
extremly
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extremely
 important is that
moeny
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money
 can make everything feasible. If someone has financial freedom from his past
saving
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savings
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, he can study in his dream university. Without
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money
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money,
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 some students, find it complicated to join their dream course, which will
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enforce
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 them to select
an
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undesirable
facluties
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faculties
facilities
.
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, if saving started from an early age, and after a reasonable amount of time, the amount of
saving
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savings
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 can support them with their tuition fees.
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,
internation
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international
 students rely on their own saving in great proportion to support themself
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 they are studying. The other main reason why
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 habit is important is that it can stay with an individual practicing it for
lifelong
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.
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, when teenagers
taught
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 to reduce their spending and save some of their income , they will be more competent to
metigate
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mitigate
 the difficult future.
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practicing
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practising
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 saving and spending
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money
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 wisely is something not easy with all these
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 outside, it is viable to learn
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activty
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activity
 far early.
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have
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 shown the difference between
indivduals
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soci-economic
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socioeconomic
 status and their saving habits. They found that
indivduals
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individuals
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money saving
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money-saving
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 discipline are more
finacially
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financially
 stable than
hyper spending
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hyper-spending
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 individuals. In conclusion, it is important,even for children, to learn how to save and spend
money
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 wisely. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it is
extremly
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extremely
 vital for their
futur
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future
 because
money
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 can facilitate their upcoming choices and
this
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 habit when it comes to action
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in
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an
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 early
ages
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 can stay till death.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that every component of the essay contributes to a central argument or theme. While your introduction and conclusion are clear, the body paragraphs need to more cohesively support your central thesis.
task achievement
Although your task response is adequate, providing more detailed and specific examples would enrich the content and strengthen your argument. Be explicit in how these examples tie back to your main points.
task achievement
Work on refining some areas of grammatical precision and vocabulary to avoid minor inaccuracies, such as spelling mistakes and word choice, to improve clarity in your writing.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively introduces and wraps up the argument for saving money from a young age.
task achievement
The writer demonstrates an understanding of the importance of money saving habits and attempts to provide supporting arguments and examples.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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