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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart depicts the cause why
people
use
 cars or bicycles for their work. After analysing the graph, it is obvious that 30% of
people
use
 a cycle for health and fitness
while
 40%
use
 a
car
 for their comfort level.Most of the
people
 who
use
car
 for a long
distance
Fix the agreement mistake
distances
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are About 21% whilst 30%
use
cycle
Correct article usage
a cycle
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due to
 less population.
In addition
, no parking problems allocate to 15% and 14% driving for faster speed.
Furthermore
, A small number of individuals about 13%
use
 cycling for free of cost
whereas
, around about same number
use
 a
car
 for free of cost.12% of
people
 think that it is faster than driving ,
however
,
people
 with a negligible difference
use
 a
car
 for safety.There is a small difference
of
Change preposition
in
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 percentage between speed and safety.
Overall
,
the
Correct article usage
a
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 bigger number of
people
use
 cycles for health and fitness and driving prioritised
to
Change preposition
apply
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comfort.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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