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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car. • Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart depicts the cause why
people
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use
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 cars or bicycles for their work. After analysing the graph, it is obvious that 30% of
people
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use
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 a cycle for health and fitness
while
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 40%
use
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 a
car
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 for their comfort level.Most of the
people
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 who
use
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car
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 for a long
distance
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distances
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are About 21% whilst 30%
use
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cycle
Correct article usage
a cycle
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due to
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 less population.
In addition
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, no parking problems allocate to 15% and 14% driving for faster speed.
Furthermore
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, A small number of individuals about 13%
use
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 cycling for free of cost
whereas
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, around about same number
use
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 a
car
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 for free of cost.12% of
people
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 think that it is faster than driving ,
however
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,
people
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 with a negligible difference
use
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 a
car
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 for safety.There is a small difference
of
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in
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 percentage between speed and safety.
Overall
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,
the
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a
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 bigger number of
people
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use
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 cycles for health and fitness and driving prioritised
to
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apply
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comfort.
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