The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances andthe amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances andthe  amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical
appliances
andthe
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and the
amount
of time spent doing
house work
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housework
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in
households
in one country between 1920 and 2019. The diagrams illustrate the
percentage
of
households
with electrical
appliances
that were washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and the number of
hours
that
households
did their
housework
each
week
in one country
in
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from
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1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the
percentage
of
households
who had had electrical
appliances
increased dramatically in each appliance,
however
, the
amount
of doing
housework
decresed
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decreased
sharply
in
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from
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1920 to 1940. In 1920 the
amount
of using electrical
appliances
what
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which
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were washing
machine
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machines
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,
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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and
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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followed by 40%, 30% and zero
percentage
by
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with
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50
hours
housework
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of housework
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in a
week
;
however
, there was a rise in all of these three
appliances
in 1940 at 50% and 60% and a decline of
hours
of
housework
by almost 15% changes in 1920 to 1940. The consumption of
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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went up rapidly from 1940 to 1980 at 100%.
On the other hand
, the
percentage
of people who used
vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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grew sharply from 1940 to 2000 and consumption of both these
appliances
remained constant from 2000 to 2019. The
amount
of usage washing
machine
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machines
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experienced a fluctuation
in
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from
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1940 to 2000 and
also
after that rose minimally
while
the number of
hours
of
housework
in each
week
decreased steadily from 1940 to 2019 at10
hours
in a
week
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Vocabulary: Replace the words appliances, amount, households, percentage, vacuum, hours, housework, week with synonyms.
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