The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances andthe amount of time spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical
appliances
andthe
Correct your spelling
and the
amount
of time spent doing house work
in Correct your spelling
housework
households
in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The diagrams illustrate the percentage
of households
with electrical appliances
that were washing machine
, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
refrigerator
and Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
vacuum
cleaner
and the number of Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
hours
that households
did their housework
each week
in one country in
1920 to 2019. Change preposition
from
Overall
, the percentage
of households
who had had electrical appliances
increased dramatically in each appliance, however
, the amount
of doing housework
decresed
sharply Correct your spelling
decreased
in
1920 to 1940.
In 1920 the Change preposition
from
amount
of using electrical appliances
what
were washing Correct pronoun usage
which
machine
, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
vacuum
cleaner
and Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
refrigerator
followed by 40%, 30% and zero Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
percentage
by
50 Change preposition
with
hours
housework
in a Change preposition
of housework
week
; however
, there was a rise in all of these three appliances
in 1940 at 50% and 60% and a decline of hours
of housework
by almost 15% changes in 1920 to 1940.
The consumption of vacuum
cleaner
went up rapidly from 1940 to 1980 at 100%.Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
On the other hand
, the percentage
of people who used vacuum
cleaner
grew sharply from 1940 to 2000 and consumption of both these Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
appliances
remained constant from 2000 to 2019. The amount
of usage washing machine
experienced a fluctuation Fix the agreement mistake
machines
in
1940 to 2000 and Change preposition
from
also
after that rose minimally while
the number of hours
of housework
in each week
decreased steadily from 1940 to 2019 at10 hours
in a week
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