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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation?

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There is a large proportion of
people
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 who go through life working in jobs that they dislike or have no
skill
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skills
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 for. I believe that
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 happens
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 the desperation for a source of income, and circumstances like
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 can cause consequences
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 as a
lack
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 of career advancement.
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, many
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 tend to look for jobs, especially in times of desperation, as they require money.
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 may be a result of life-changing moments.
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, teen pregnancies are quite common and because of
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, the soon-to-be parents are forced into finding a job to be able to support their family.
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 the urgency of finding an income source, these individuals find positions of employment that they hate,
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 as being a cashier, which usually does not require talent.
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, these
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 may not have anyone to exert influence on them to change their life choices.
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, there is no doubt that these situations come with consequences
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 as a
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 of motivation. With a
lack
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 of motivation, individuals do not have the goal of advancing or changing their
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.
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, most often, a cashier cannot be promoted to a position higher than a manager,
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,
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 deters
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 from putting in the effort.
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, with less experience in the working industry, it is hard to be hired for another job
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 competitiveness. In conclusion, a majority of the population experiences life doing work that they hate
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 unforeseen circumstances that occur, which require them to earn money.
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, motivation is lost which leads to laziness and a
lack
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 of vision for the future.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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