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The plans below show the ground floor of a library in 2001 and how it was redeveloped in 2009.

The given plan illustrates the ground floor of a library in 2001
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renovated eight years
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 in 2009.
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, it is clearly observed that there were rearrangement and introduction of new area.
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, the layout was nearly the same
to
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 its previous one where
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the center
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center
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 of the floor
were tables
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were tabled
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.
To begin
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 with, a closer look at the plan in 2001, starting from the
the
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entrance at the bottom where
librarian's
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the librarian's
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 desk
situated
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 right
infront
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in front
 of it and stairs connecting to
next
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the next
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 floor on the right corner. There were tables located at the
center
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 of the layout and surrounded with
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 at all three corners; Self-help
book
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books
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 and history on the left, Fiction at the top and
Newspapaer
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Newspaper
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 and periodicals on
its
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 right side. In 2009, it is noticeable that there were both major and minor changes.
At
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 the left side,
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 were collected to one side of the wall with the additional three
genre
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 of books: kitchen, economics and law.
Moreover
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,
fiction
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the fiction
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 zone was replaced with
table
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a table
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 zone and
children's
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a children's
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 area nearby. The tables were
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 into longer
one
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 and the newspaper
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also
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 replaced with films and DVDs
instead
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.
Addtionally
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, the
computers
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 area
were
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 introduced not far from the librarian's desk. Task 2

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introduction conclusion present
Ensure to have a clear introduction and conclusion in the essay. Currently, the absence of a concluding statement makes it feel incomplete.
logical structure
Enhance the logical flow between paragraphs by using more cohesive devices and transitions.
clear comprehensive ideas
Avoid repetitions and check for grammatical errors to improve the clarity and precision of ideas.
complete response
Elaborate more on specific changes and details to fully achieve the task requirements.
supported main points
The essay effectively describes the changes made to the library layout from 2001 to 2009.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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