Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.
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technology
has improved the methods we have been using to communicate with each other and provides more facilities. In the beginning, basic devices used for communication, Use synonyms
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as telephone, telegraph machines, mail etc…, which provided facilities for only voice calls, have been improved gradually and at the moment Linking Words
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, with the support of internet coverage, smartphones and social media have enabled Linking Words
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a need to conduct an official meeting, all participants had to gather in one place and conduct the meeting physically. But at present, almost all of the meetings are conducted online via Zoom, which provides the same experience and Wrong verb form
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On the other hand
, heavy usage of the internet and social media makes Linking Words
people
spend more time with their laptops and smartphones, which results in the reduction of physical gatherings. Use synonyms
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the above, the separation between Linking Words
people
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issue can be overcome by implementing proper activities among youth, which will make them engage in more physical activities.
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The introduction clearly states the essay's position, making it easy for readers to understand the perspective from the outset.
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Usage of a personal example to illustrate the positive side of technology in communication is relevant and strengthens your argument.
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