In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, in some
countries
people believe that it is essential to spend vast Add a comma
countries,
amount
of Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
money
on developing advanced high-speed trains
throughout the cities
. In opposed to those who think that money
shoud
be invested Correct your spelling
should
on
upgrading existing public Change preposition
in
transportation
. In this
essay, I will discuss both perspectives.
People are getting more busy
in Replace the words
busier
this
competitive world, the
population Correct word choice
and the
incresaing
every year which indicates human trafficking. Correct your spelling
increasing
Therefore
, travel from one city to another for work purpose
; for Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
this
occasion
workers must get a faster, better and Add a comma
occasion,
advanced
Correct quantifier usage
more advanced
transportation
system as bullet trains
. Regarding this
, the government should spend a good amount of money
to build fastest
Correct article usage
the fastest
trains
for transport between cities
. For instance
, an employee of CTG company, who lives far from his working zone and has to travel with
public Change preposition
by
transportation
, in the middle of the way he often gets traffic
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into traffic
jam
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jams
due to
so many vehicles on the road, that is
why he attend
late at his company. Change the verb form
attends
Moreover
if there was an option for faster Add a comma
Moreover,
trains
which will
take him from his city to his destination that would help him to attend his Wrong verb form
would
work place
early without hesitation.
Correct your spelling
workplace
In contrast
, those who think that money
should spend
on existing public Wrong verb form
be spent
transportation
due to
its bad road conditions and other casualties. In many
Change preposition
Many
cities
do not have a minimum amount of quality mass transit and cannot offer a safe journey throughout cities
. For example
, in the city Mymenisgh
there is Change preposition
of Mymenisgh
a
poor road Correct article usage
apply
condition
and fragile public Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
transportation
because of no maintenance. Therefore
, people get stuck in huge traffic jam
Fix the agreement mistake
jams
while
they are traveling for
their destination. SoChange preposition
to
that
, it is wiser to invest Correct determiner usage
apply
on
existing public Change preposition
in
transportation
.
In conclusion, in my opinion, I think both of their point of view has many
strong evidence for future development. Wrong verb form
have
Hence
, government should take action about these problems and invest money
wisely.Submitted by AL NURE FOYZUR REZA SUPRIO on
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