In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, in some

countries

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people believe that it is essential to spend vast

amount

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money

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on developing advanced high-speed

trains

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throughout the

cities

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. In opposed to those who think that

money

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shoud

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should

be invested

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upgrading existing public

transportation

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. In

this

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essay, I will discuss both perspectives. People are getting

more busy

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this

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competitive world,

the

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population

incresaing

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increasing

every year which indicates human trafficking.

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, travel from one city to another for work

purpose

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; for

this

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occasion

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workers must get a faster, better and

advanced

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transportation

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system as bullet

trains

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. Regarding

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, the government should spend a good amount of

money

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to build

fastest

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trains

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for transport between

cities

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, an employee of CTG company, who lives far from his working zone and has to travel

with

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public

transportation

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, in the middle of the way he often gets

traffic

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into traffic

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jam

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due to

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so many vehicles on the road,

that is

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why he

attend

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late at his company.

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Moreover

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if there was an option for faster

trains

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which

will

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would

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take him from his city to his destination that would help him to attend his

work place

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workplace

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early without hesitation.

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, those who think that

money

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should

spend

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be spent

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on existing public

transportation

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due to

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its bad road conditions and other casualties.

In many

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cities

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do not have a minimum amount of quality mass transit and cannot offer a safe journey throughout

cities

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, in the city

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there is

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apply

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poor road

condition

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conditions

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and fragile public

transportation

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because of no maintenance.

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, people get stuck in huge traffic

jam

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jams

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while

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they are traveling

for

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their destination. So

that

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apply

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, it is wiser to invest

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existing public

transportation

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. In conclusion, in my opinion, I think both of their point of view

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strong evidence for future development.

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, government should take action about these problems and invest

money

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wisely.

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task achievement

Your essay presents the topic and offers a response, but more depth and specific examples would improve clarity. Consider elaborating on your points to fully cover the prompt and develop each perspective further.

coherence cohesion

While your ideas connect logically, they could benefit from smoother transitions and clearer organization. Consider using linking words to enhance the flow from one paragraph to another.

introduction conclusion present

Your introduction effectively sets up the discussion of both perspectives, providing a clear sense of the essay's direction.

complete response

You attempt to present balanced viewpoints, showcasing your understanding of the topic and adherence to the task requirements.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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