In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new fast trains between cities. others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, in some
countries
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people believe that it is essential to spend vast
amount
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amounts
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of
money
on developing advanced high-speed
trains
throughout the
cities
. In opposed to those who think that
money
shoud
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should
be invested
on
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upgrading existing public
transportation
. In
this
essay, I will discuss both perspectives. People are getting
more busy
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in
this
competitive world,
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and the
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population
incresaing
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increasing
every year which indicates human trafficking.
Therefore
, travel from one city to another for work
purpose
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purposes
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; for
this
occasion
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occasion,
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workers must get a faster, better and
advanced
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more advanced
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transportation
system as bullet
trains
. Regarding
this
, the government should spend a good amount of
money
to build
fastest
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the fastest
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trains
for transport between
cities
.
For instance
, an employee of CTG company, who lives far from his working zone and has to travel
with
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public
transportation
, in the middle of the way he often gets
traffic
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into traffic
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jam
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jams
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due to
so many vehicles on the road,
that is
why he
attend
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late at his company.
Moreover
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if there was an option for faster
trains
which
will
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would
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take him from his city to his destination that would help him to attend his
work place
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workplace
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early without hesitation.
In contrast
, those who think that
money
should
spend
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be spent
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on existing public
transportation
due to
its bad road conditions and other casualties.
In many
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cities
do not have a minimum amount of quality mass transit and cannot offer a safe journey throughout
cities
.
For example
, in the city
Mymenisgh
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of Mymenisgh
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there is
a
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apply
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poor road
condition
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conditions
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and fragile public
transportation
because of no maintenance.
Therefore
, people get stuck in huge traffic
jam
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jams
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while
they are traveling
for
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to
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their destination. So
that
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apply
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, it is wiser to invest
on
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in
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existing public
transportation
. In conclusion, in my opinion, I think both of their point of view
has many
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have
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strong evidence for future development.
Hence
, government should take action about these problems and invest
money
wisely.
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task achievement
Your essay presents the topic and offers a response, but more depth and specific examples would improve clarity. Consider elaborating on your points to fully cover the prompt and develop each perspective further.
coherence cohesion
While your ideas connect logically, they could benefit from smoother transitions and clearer organization. Consider using linking words to enhance the flow from one paragraph to another.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively sets up the discussion of both perspectives, providing a clear sense of the essay's direction.
complete response
You attempt to present balanced viewpoints, showcasing your understanding of the topic and adherence to the task requirements.
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