In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own countries. Nowadays, they have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and the disadvantages of this development?
People nowadays have more opportunities to study abroad than in the past.
This
phenomenon has both benefits and drawbacks. The benefit is that student can enhance their knowledge in countries with a better
Correct the article-noun agreement
better education systems
a better education system
education
systems. However
, it reduces the number
of enrolled students
in their own country
. This
essay will elaborate on both sides.
On the one hand, developed countries such
as Indonesia have a lower rank of education
system and pursuing a degree in a Add an article
the education
country
with a better academic system will expose the students
to more knowledge and increase the quality of people. Besides
, they can acquire more insight through interaction with classmates from various backgrounds, and as a result
, it will broaden their perspective. In Indonesia, for example
, there is a scholarship for students
to study abroad, the students
are able to deepen their knowledge and contribute even more after they come back.
On the other hand
, because the education
sector contributes to the government's gross domestic profit or GDP, the low number
of students
in the country
will reduce the GDP as well. The universities charge their students
with a tuition fee to develop the facilities and if the enrolled students
are below expectations, it will affect the development. In the chemistry major, for instance
, the staff should maintain the lab facilities periodically thus
the undergraduates and postgraduates can obtain proper lab experiences and as a consequence
of the low number
of students
, they can not maintain it properly.
To conclude
, the increase in the opportunities for students
to study abroad in the country
also
increases the people's quality because they can obtain a better education
and implement it after they go back. However
, it leads to a decrease number
of students
in the country
and affects the GDP and education
facilities development.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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task response
Try to diversify examples from other fields or countries for a broader perspective.
coherence and cohesion
Strong introduction and conclusion, effectively setting and summarizing the topic.
task response
Good use of relevant examples such as Indonesia's scholarship program, explaining both perspectives.
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