The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the
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of
shops
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and the
number
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of new
shops
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that opened in one specified country between 2011 and 2018.
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,if we looked at the given data closures and openings
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shops
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decreased over the 7 years. Looking at the details for closures, the
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of new stores was more than 6000 in 2011.
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until 2014,sharply fell during 1 year,again dramatically rose to more than 5000 in 2016 and
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back to 5000.
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, it almost levelled off from 2016 to 2018. The
number
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of new
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opening was at a peak of more than 8000 in 2011.First significantly declined,
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grew from 2011 to 2014.
According to
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given data openings dipped to 4000 in 2015 and
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from 2015 to 2016.
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this
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slightly peaked and reached
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3000
at the end
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of the period.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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