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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart compares data about how much time per
week
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( 1000 seconds) in 5 different weeks 3 various files downloaded from the Internet.
Overall
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, it was important that ActiveX was the main item that was downloaded;
moreover
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, the trend of all of them climbed over the period of 5 weeks.
According to
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 the diagram, at the start, ActiveX, the most popular factor that people downloaded, hit nearly 70;
then
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 it increased moderately to roughly 90 in
Week
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 3;
however
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, it reduced to 100 in
Week
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 4, but
finally
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, it reached the maximum point at just over 120. The graph demonstrates that Java, the second one, scored roughly 40 in
Week
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 1;
thereafter
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, it jumped somewhat and touched approximately 80 in
Week
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 5. The
last
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 element was the Net;
additionally
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, in the beginning, it recorded about 30 after that, its fashion declined slightly to the lowest mark at almost 10;
nevertheless
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, it rose to nearly 50 in
Week
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 5.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrates
  • trends
  • downloads
  • gradual decline
  • surge
  • popularity
  • frequently downloaded
  • maintained position
  • initially
  • significant gains
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