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Band 6

A colleague gave you a book which you used for your presentation. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter, you should say: what the presentation was about, why the presentation was important how the book helped you.

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Dear Mika, I am writing
this
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 letter to thank you for your book
that
Correct pronoun usage
which

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 really helped me in my marketing project presentation. My boss gave me the deadline
of
Change preposition
for

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 my project for one month to make a
promoting
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promotional

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 strategy for our new products.
This
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 duty was so important to me so I had to finish it and if I had fulfilled
this
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 speech, I would have been promoted.
This
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 project was
a
Correct article usage
apply

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pretty
challenge
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challenging

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 and
also
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 a great opportunity for me to express my
skillful
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skilful

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 ability. And so lucky when you gave me an advertising reference book which has a lot of useful marketing information for me when we talked at the company can-tin two weeks ago.
Finally
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, I completed it on time. Yesterday, I had a wonderful performance in front of my boss and all
company
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the company

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 shareholders so they were really satisfied with my lecture. I will have a good career path in the future and I am glad and happy with that. I honestly appreciate your help, you are a beautiful piece of my life .
Your
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Yours

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 faithfully Mia

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coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down the ideas into even more distinct paragraphs for improved clarity.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance readability.
task achievement
The letter clearly addressed the task by expressing gratitude, explaining the presentation topic, its importance, and how the book helped.
task achievement
The tone is suitably formal and appreciative, appropriate for writing to a colleague.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with greeting and closing, making it understandable.
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