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You are a member of an International Students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. Write a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter • offer to make a popular dish from your country • describe what this dish is • explain why it should be included in the event

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Hi Luis, I'm writing
this
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 email regarding
about
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apply
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the
food
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 event
is
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that is
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 going to happen in a few days in our club. I would like to request to add
few
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a few
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items
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(dosa and idly)
in
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to
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 the
food
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 menu. In our club, the majority of students are
indian
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Indian
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,
adding
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and adding
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this menu
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this menu item
these menu items
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items
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in
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to
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 our
food
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 menu definitely gain profit from
this
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 event.
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, even some
of
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local people
also
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 love to eat
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this
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this item
these items
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items
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. Especially providing
offer
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an offer
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to
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for
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this
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 item, more people are very interested
to attend
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in attending
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this
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 event to grab the offer.
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This
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This food item
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food
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items
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 is very special
food
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 in our country, it
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 more protein and nutrition in it.
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, we can customize the
items
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 in different
items
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. Hoping for
the
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 positive response. Regards Dhivya Ravi
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general
Ensure each paragraph has a single central idea.
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Try to maintain a clear logical flow between sentences.
task achievement
You addressed the task by offering to add specific dishes, describing them, and explaining their significance.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and suitable tone for the task.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and courteous.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Contribution
  • Cuisine
  • Traditional
  • Ingredients
  • Preparation
  • Cultural significance
  • Celebrate
  • Diversity
  • Culinary traditions
  • National dish
  • Occasion
  • Unique attributes
  • Preparation method
  • Gourmet
  • Authentic
  • Flavorful
  • Recipe
  • Event arrangements
  • Showcase
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