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The table shows results of 2 surveys done in 1980 and 2010 on various aspects of city living on a particular city.Units are measured in percentage

The table shows results of 2 surveys done in 1980 and 2010 on various aspects of city living on a particular city.Units are measured in percentage
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The tables illustrate surveys in 1980 and 2010. The tables survey
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 six aspects of city living:
education
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,
healthcare
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, environment,
shops
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, employment, and
transport
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. Data are divided into 3 categories: Good, Neither good nor bad, and bad. "In the 'Good'
category
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,
healthcare
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 received the highest rating,
while
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 transportation received the lowest. In the 'Neither Good Nor Bad'
category
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,
healthcare
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 had the lowest rating,
while
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shops
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 had the highest. In the 'Bad'
category
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,
education
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 received the lowest rating, and transportation the highest." In 1980,
healthcare
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 received the highest good rating at 82%
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transport
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 had the lowest at 52%. By 2010,
education
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 reached the rating top “Good” at 82%,
whereas
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transport
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 fell to 39%. The
transport
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 declined by 13% from 1980. Environment remained relatively stable with a slight decrease from 72% to 71%.
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, in 1980, the lowest
percentage
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 of "Neither good nor bad" was in
healthcare
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 at 10%,
while
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 the highest was in
shops
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 at 24%. In 2010,
this
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category
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 was the highest in
shops
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 at 24% and the lowest was in employment at 5%. In 1980,
education
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 had the lowest "Bad"
percentage
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 at 5%,
while
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 transportation had the highest
percentage
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 at 32%. In 2010, the "Bad"
percentage
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 for
education
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 increased to 9%, increasing by 4% from 1980. The highest rating for
transport
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 was 38%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, healthcare, shops, transport, category, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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