The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in

one area, in 1997 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the information about how many
people
participate
Wrong verb form
participated
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in seven types of
sports
in 1997 and 2017
Overall
it can be seen that Tennis was the most interesting
sports
Fix the agreement mistake
sport
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in both years ,
whereas
In 1997, Around 50,000
people
showed interest in Tennis,which is the highest
number
of all
sports
.The other
sports
,which were swimming,golf, rugby and football had approximately the same
number
of adults at around
above
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apply
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30,000.Followed closely by Cricket which was 25,000 and the least participated sport was basketball at below 10,000. In 2017,Tennis had more
people
participating than in 1997 and still had the highest
number
of
people
which was 55,000.
Although
Football
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in Football
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and Rugby the
number
of adults increased to below 50,000,Golf and swimming had the same
number
of adults at above 30,000.The rest were Cricket
which
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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the
number
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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significantly decreased to 8,000
whereas
basketball seemed to
had
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have
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more
people
at 22,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, sports, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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