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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the worker more. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays migration is very common, every day thousands of
people
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 cross borders in order to find a better quality of life.
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, developed
nations
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 usually hire
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 from poorer ones, causing problems in those states who are in need of skilful employees.
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, there is a heated debate about whether
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 should happen or not.
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, without a doubt,
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 situation is an issue for the worker's original country, because indigent states are deprived of their best minds, so they will never be able to grow properly.
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, recently in Italy
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 the lack of doctors, hospitals are hiring physicians from all over the world
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 as Cuba or Mexico.
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, these
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 even though are investing money to make their inhabitants study, doctors are still missing! If only Italy had decided to put more money into medical schools rather than paying
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 from abroad, maybe both
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 would have a good public sanitary system.
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, not only highly educated workers are involved but
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 manual ones.
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, farmers are often needed in rich countries, since there are no inhabitants in those states who want to do that.
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, in most cases, these employees are paid less than they should be, only because they are from abroad.
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, big companies are getting richer at the expense of common
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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 problem should be faced as soon as possible, in order to prevent the collapse of the world's economic system.
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, I believe that richer
nations
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 should try to invest more in forming their citizens,
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 of getting skilled labour from somewhere else.
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, they could
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 help countries in need, rather than employ their best workers.
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