he diagram below shows the water cycle , which is the continuous movement if water in, above and below the surface of the earth
The illustration shows the
water
cycle, that continuously repeats a lot of times.
The cycle starts by Use synonyms
producting
Correct your spelling
producing
water
vapour and finishes by coming back Use synonyms
water
in oceans and so Use synonyms
one
.
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on
Firstly
, Linking Words
water
in oceans transforms into Use synonyms
water
vapour, which Use synonyms
collecting
together and Wrong verb form
collects
making
clouds. Vapour transforms into Wrong verb form
makes
water
and it Use synonyms
is
rains. When it rains over mountains, there are two ways of storaging the rain. Unnecessary verb
apply
First,
rain hits lakes and Linking Words
save
Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
in
them. Change preposition
apply
Second,
Linking Words
water
hits the snow top of mountains and through groundwater gets into the ocean.Use synonyms
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