he diagram below shows the water cycle , which is the continuous movement if water in, above and below the surface of the earth

he diagram below shows the water cycle , which is the continuous movement if water in, above and below the surface of the earth
The illustration shows the
water
cycle, that continuously repeats a lot of times. The cycle starts by
producting
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producing
water
vapour and finishes by coming back
water
in oceans and so
one
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on
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.
Firstly
,
water
in oceans transforms into
water
vapour, which
collecting
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collects
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together and
making
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makes
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clouds. Vapour transforms into
water
and it
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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rains. When it rains over mountains, there are two ways of storaging the rain.
First,
rain hits lakes and
save
Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
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in
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apply
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them.
Second,
water
hits the snow top of mountains and through groundwater gets into the ocean.
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  • evaporation
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